One Morning Suzie had gone for a walk . She had walk past a shop with a lot of creepy dolls. She looked confused ,she said to herself “that looks like me”so she tried to get in but the door didn't open. So she made a snowball a throw it at the door then it opened so she ran inside. Looking for the doll when she found the doll and touched it and she disappeared and then she realized she was in the doll body . She could not move at all.
Like so many years later another girl came along .Saw a abandoned shop she was like“ look at that doll”. She tried to open the door but it was way too hard to out so she walk off then it open she came back with a big smile she walk inside and look at all the creepy dolls she said to herself “ I have to find that other doll “. She looked around the shop and found the doll on top of a shelf she grabbed it and she disappeared
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Like an eternity later a little girl with blue hair and her name is winter as she walk past the shop and saw a doll that looks like her she said to herself “ That looks like me”.She was like thats a doll I would like to have . She tried to open the door but I was like a rock was behind it so she ran off then I like a ghost opened it . Her face went into shock she said to herself “ what was I looking for “she realized she was looking for that doll that looks the same as her. She found it and disappeared Not again .
As like so many years later a little boy came and saw a shop with a lot of girl dolls and boy dolls. He said to himself that doll would be a good doll to buy. He tried to open the door and he got the door open . He ran in looking for the doll that looks like him . He found the doll near the door he thought he was trying to escape the shop. So he grab it and disappeared really again this all was happen.To be continued
Friday, 28 September 2018
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Kia Ora Tia. WOW! What an interesting story. I look forward to reading the rest.I did find it a little hard to read as there isn't much punctuation and I wasn't sure when one sentence stopped and another began. Is this a story that you made up yourself or did someone give you ideas? I look forward to your reply
ReplyDeleteKia ora Tia,
ReplyDeleteWow! I completely agree with Mrs Cassidy. This is an amazing story. After I finished reading it, I immediately wanted to know what happened next! Are you able to post another blog soon that continues the story? I hope so!
If you enjoy telling stories, please consider joining the Summer Learning Journey (SLJ) programme. It is a free summer programme that is offered to students in specific schools across New Zealand, including Hornby Primary! There are lots of fun activities posted on the Summer Learning Journey website, including some that involve writing short stories. I think that you would do a great job with the programme. Each time you complete an activity with the Summer Learning Journey you earn points. At the end of the summer, Emma will add up your points and she will come back to Hornby Primary School to hand out certificates to everyone who participates. She will also have prizes for most active participants!
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